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Dreams Of Sunrise by ~Abu-Jamal:iconAbu-Jamal:



It seems that dreams have left this world
since I’ve outgrown childhood
And all is made of loss and cold banality –
so I go walking at the break of dawn in search of some beauty.

The sun’s warm rays caressed my face like a gentle lover’s hands,
but still I saw the grime and filth a-covering these lands.
And I’ve known no gentle lovers, so my judgment holds no weight,
and even in this summer, a cold wind still seems my fate.

I stopped by a soft and gentle creek to rest and catch my breath,
for I found fear when I found the field where I died my first death
so I ran ‘til I couldn’t smell the scent of lust among the grass
and the dark marsh creek formed a barrier I found I could not pass.

So I was forced to go and find some stones beside the railroad tracks
and carry them down to the creek; yet stones that creek still lacks.
For when I went to throw one in, I came upon a thrush –
it spread its bill and spoke to me in a voice I could not crush.

This royal, white bird, it spoke to me not in tarnished words –
it spoke to me in a language I knew to be the tongue of birds.
It said, “If you drop this stone on me, I still will spread my wings,
for I shall always join in the song that wondrous nature sings.”

I had already let the stone fall down onto the sodden ground
so now I stood in an awe-struck daze before the truth that I had found.
Slowly I turned my head to the sky and found it was now day
and that’s why I stand before you now as this song takes me away.
©2009 ~Abu-Jamal
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Author's Comments

On the same page of the notebook I took with me on my walk (which is the only true part of the song), right above the beginning of this song:

The sun rises up in a blaze of holy light -
shining down so great and pure and bright.
It burns across the land 'til fire fills our sight -
I don't know much of anything, but I know that this is right.

I like it. Kinda works with this. Maybe it could be adapted to be made into the chorus.

Oh, you might want to view it in the Times New Roman font, not the Arial one, as the lines are long and the Arial font is bigger, so it sometimes makes one line into one line, followed by one really short line.

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:iconroom462:
HAHA!!! I live it. it has a very clever turn around towards the end. your rhyme scheme is very good too. i especially love the first 2 lines of the 5th stanza

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I want my film to be beautiful.
not realistic.

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:iconabu-jamal:
Thank you.

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So I start off toward somewhere new.
And I know the beauty will come shining through
All this dark rain and unfriendly snow.
Yes, there’s always a tomorrow.
:iconroom462:
no problem man!

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I want my film to be beautiful.
not realistic.

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